This is part 3 of my critique an email I received from a well known Christian online community that is for readers to discover great content and engage with their favorite Christian authors. Click to read part 1. Click to read part 2.
Email below the fold
Finally, we get to a call-to-action, “Watch the Video”. However, I’m still not certain what this is about or where it is leading me. What do they want me to gain by watching the video? Is the story further clarified in the video?
Hold up but, there’s more. Maybe it’s not about the video. Is it about the blog or the book the excerpt is from? The entire story is an excerpt from a book. The call to action appears to be about pre-ordering the book. It would have been good to know that upfront.
The end could and should have been the beginning. Wouldn’t it have been more effective to use the existing subject line, the image and call-to-action below. The sender could have placed a form with a link to the excerpt. With the form they could have gathered additional information about the reader and taken them out of the email environment to the landing page where they would have their undivided attention.